Hi Ana, I love the start of your recount. What a great way to hook the reader into what was about to happen. I thought it was funny that you both thought it was a dream but were so happy when you found out it was real. A great recount Ana, Mahi pai.
Hi Ana, Well done on writing detailed sentences with a lot of interesting words like you writing about your mum and dad creeping in your room and you tapping on your brother's head. Great use of organising your writing in paragraphs. Well done.
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Hi Ana, I love the start of your recount. What a great way to hook the reader into what was about to happen.
ReplyDeleteI thought it was funny that you both thought it was a dream but were so happy when you found out it was real.
A great recount Ana, Mahi pai.
Hi Mum thank you for your comment and I think it was funny that we thought it was a dream.
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ReplyDeleteWell done on writing detailed sentences with a lot of interesting words like you writing about your mum and dad creeping in your room and you tapping on your brother's head.
Great use of organising your writing in paragraphs. Well done.
Hi Manpreet thank you for your comment.
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